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Creative Work: Storyboard (Sweet Sixteen)

Below is a storyboard I created, illustrating an idea for the introductory scene in a potential short film to write for my coursework, and the feedback I got after it had been marked.

My Storyboard


Feedback

In response to the feedback regarding shot duration, I think that at the beginning of the sequence, the shots would be longer, around 5 seconds each, to help establish Maddy's character, and in the case of the second shot, to allow the viewer to read the text on Maddy's phone. Then, as the montage begins, the shots would become significantly shorter, to provide a fast pace, similar to Edgar Wright's editing style, to keep the viewer interested and add comic effect.

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